All Comments on 'Sins of the Father Pt. 02'

I'll come back on chapter 30 and start on it...

shorty chapters drive me bonkers

It could be a 4 - 5 page story but why give it to us a half page at a time?

Also, new critique: Really short, one page, chapters? Also tedious.

Suggestion: Delete the first two chapters, clean up the "drunk speak", combine the one page chapters into something a bit more substantial (3 to 4 pages), and resubmit the edited story.

Leaving all the g's after in* makes them sound like a bunch o' hicks.

This is a very good story. Instead of readers making positive comments about how they liked the story line all they are doing is bitch, bitch, bitch. Give me a break.