by ChristmasHumphries
Nice premise and a lot of “good” words but they seemed to be sprinkled all over. I almost wondered if it was written by an AI :) Sorry for the brutal comments but there is potential. I sincerely hope you can work with an editor to make this better.
Venus
Seems to have been written by two authors?
Mid stream the typos pop up and context variants appear. Then, about two thirds through the text returns to similar to the initial portion.
Anyway, fun romp due to strange circumstances.
Not especially stimulating unless the reader is bent that way.
Good try . . . You will get better.
Excellent story, only criticism would be it could have used some build up in the beginning, cant wait to see more chapters!