All Comments on 'Sister/Genie Ch. 08'

I like your characters, the setting and your more female twist on a genie adventure...

I don't know where this is all going, but I'm along for the ride.

Just like I previously said in a comment on a previous installment. The biggest problem with your story is that it just rambles on without any clear direction at this point. In the first two chapters, Jaya's discovery of the bottle as well as her problems with her employment provided a goal for the story to continue towards. Right now it is just meandering randomly and the main focus is sex on top of more sex. That's not really a story so much as it's just something to jerk off to. BORING!

Please put more effort into creating a reason for the characters to exist and focus less on the sexual encounters. 3/5

-- one step plot advance, two steps more sex, ... nice ratio, ... ;-) TTFN

Don't listen to ScottishTexan. He always comments on stories with his opinion instead of just enjoying the stories for what they are. He gives low rating despite the high quality just because it's not how he would have written it. You do you, write for yourself, and anyone reading this is lucky it's been freely published.