by mrnicerguy
Nine years later and we are still waiting for him to finish!
One star.
You call yourselves authors, but can not seem to end a story. I thought that was basic writing 101.
pointless shit. you are just a fucking cuck and enjoy it. the end is missing. after reading this fag crap I'm rating 1* even the other.
I think everyone who read it would have been anxiously waiting for the next episode - but there isn't one! It's been a couple of years since this one, so I guess something must have happened to the author - damned shame, there isn't much that matches this quality of storytelling here.
Chapter 2 was spent almost in it's entirity by establishing that Jen was a slut, way too much of the story devoted to this one point. What should have time devoted was to establish exactly how Jen became a slut, what was her motivation, why did she knowingly want to destroy her marrage while pursuing empty sexual acts with nobodys ? Then at the end of Chapter 2 there was no ending that addressed any of the major issues of the story it just simply stopped.
The "author" should have his money refunded from primary school!!
Is there more?? :)
I'd love to read a continuation. Very well written and a gripping story.
....expressing his anger that doesn't end up a wimp.What's taking so long?
Gave you a 100 for carrying on. This could go so many ways as pointed out by others. But our lead needs to be carefull. Six month's and seperated and feeling better. Putting his life back together. Hasn't killed anyone yet or ruined anyone life yet. Worried about kids, and just trying to survive. So I am not sure if his new source of info is really trying to help him or set him up for a bigger fall. She could be a source of healing and relief you might say or lead him into a sinister and diabolical trap. Remember she still loves big equipment. So lets see where your story goes. But the only one here that is innocent is the our lead character. Everyone else is guilty, some lesser than others but. Who knows. Thanks for his tale and sharing your time and talent with us.
The husband is upset and angry at the moment. Keep him that way. He should feel that way. I am interested to know where you go from here.
Well written and presented. Very erotic and descriptive sex scenes.Thanks for the good read.
Ever so vigilante, but not be needed here. Wife and husband don't even like each other. I like the idea of this story, but to me it comes off kind of bla. I like strong emotions and conflicts (no matter the story, but within context). but I kind of get la-de-da here. At least I think we can all agree that the wife is just an asshole. To make her more than that is giving her too much credit.
There can be no basis for reconciliation here. He has just seen too much and will never be able to go back!
if the hubby don't expose frank and wife he got what was coming to him.
I am not a fan of chapters. You are making the wife very evil. Now I wonder if you will reconcile them? That seems a stretch.