All Comments on 'Skaterboi Ch. 02'

Jeez Louise, wtf? I know Val is supposed to be basically dying, but damn, what you described at that locker made me cringe. So, just to make sure I am clear, this guy shot up some sort of opiod/cocaine (sp?) concoction into his thigh, then snorted more of said blend up his nose, the proceeded to smoke high-CBD weed from a vape pen all within the span of say...20 minutes. No wonder he needed an ambulance. Honestly, I am glad you wrote it like that, because any other scenario would sound absolutely bonkers.

I am liking the story, but please don't kill off everyone too soon 😊

Good but not great.

Good story, the first and second part are a very nice job of character development,, but what the HELL? You cannot end the story the way you left everything hanging at the end of chapter two..

You've got Kat with lust and love and affection issues. you have a sick patient that has gone to the hospital. And to be frank, I would not have written that Jack left and wandered off.. Seriously? yes he felt like HE caused the 'heart attack' or whatever Val was experiencing, but; Just WHAT could Jack have done to change the inevitable attack? Try to interrupt Val and his self-medication?

I'd say that VAL only said he needed to go to the Hospital because he expected Jack to go with him. So Jack abandons VAL.. hmm hot right..

So lots to fix in chapters 3 and 4, at least.. This actually could be a great story,, With several possible endings..

DV19