All Comments on 'Sleeping with Friend's Mom Ch. 05'

Get an editor to help you develop a flow to your words. Writing too choppy, not well connected. Good luck.

This story has been absolutely amazing, please keep writing parts for this one, don't do any other series. This one is the best

It's a great plot, but there were so many spelling and punctuation errors in the 5 chapters that it was almost unreadable. I had editors go over the 4 submissiins that I have pending. If one of them is published, it will be the first in 8 years. If you got these published, mine should be.

I trust you will write at least one more chapter.

On top of everything else, Pete is an idiot.

Busy playing his games...Will he figure out his mom and Ben are up to something when he moved in or gets pregnant?

Probably not.

If the author wants to develop a believable character, give him some dialog and some intelligence.

wheres part 6?

Definitely a lot errors you need a editor or a better editor and another thing how the fuck did he go from 8 inch to 10 I mean seriously even in a fantasy story that can't happen

There are a lot of conflicting info in these past and present chapters. Ben from 8 to10 inches, you keep referring to Ben’s parents but only his mother shows up, someone called Audrey “Mrs Anderson”, a store 2 blocks away takes 30 minutes to drive there, etc. where is Audrey getting money to Xmas shop, do family meals cooking, from her parents? Does Jason still have a job? Audrey can’t get child support because Pete is over 18. Never determined if her parents were still working? You need at least someone else, proofreading your stories