All Comments on 'Slut like Mommy Used to Make Ch. 01'

Sucks

I really did try to read this story, but all the missing words drove me away. Throw in all the misspelled words and I lost interest. Use an editor next time.

The whole construction and how aggressive it started was just bad. You killed any possible build-up with that beginning.

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if the son had turned it on the mother during the last are you sure, when she looks to the her before answering. Only after punishing, fucking and making the mom his slave does he take the sister off by herself where she willingly becomes his slave, free from moms control, he's the dom not the mom.

I enjoyed your story. The mistakes are okay, just read through your work and edit it before posting and you should be good to go. Me and my wife are into the whole BDSM thing and she's submissive but to a point. Unfortunately we're not in a place yet where I can use her like the mom and brother used Katie. I hope you continue this story

Very good story line. I would like to see more.

This story was very nice. It fulfilled it's purpose. However, I do have to admit, the brother's sudden change was... a bit too sudden. Lust is not something that is so sudden. It builds, and slowly replaces their kindness for it to return afterward. A slave does need to be cared for after all, even if they are cared for like an animal.

When you're in a house, bedroom or not, you don't throw clothes on the ground, you drop them on the floor.

And there are many more errors. You need an Editor to proofread your stories.

You jumped from two journal entries at the start of training to the end where she was given to her brother

the brother shifted too rapidly from someone who had no clue to a dom on the same level as the step mother

this could be a multi entry story quite easily

Thinking that you make its new chapter but please make it better than this one.

OMFG YES I started out with one finger in my cunt then my fist got in deep and I came all over my chare I would love to be a owned slut like this for any couple. you made me crave abuse. keep it up PLEASE

This was a pretty good story. You do need an editor to work on your Grammar. Maybe in the next chapter step mommy can do the same thing to her husband and she can also fuck her stepson too..