by TheBigCheese123
I rated pt1 to 4 stars, this one to 2 though. The closet voyeur cliché stuff was way too far.
I enjoy your writing, but I think you need to get to the fucking.
Mia talking dirty the whole time.
I'd prefer her in lingerie, heels, being a cum craving fuck slut.
However, your creative path is yours
She needs to catch him watching her fucking her self and get to feel the real thing deep in her pussy