All Comments on 'Smile for the Camera Ch. 07'

Nice effort...thanks! But the end result truly calls out for proof reading - it's off-putting to have to navigate through all the erroneous pronouns and adjectives.

Another suggestion: a stroke story is a lot more interesting when there's a little variety in the pace and action between the characters. For example, the poker players progressed in absolute lockstep through the game as if in a mathematical formula, with the result that the suspense was diminished.

You've got the dirty mind...a good place to start! With a little more care and creativity you can write a story folks can jerk off to.

There are some real and honest emotions here. The series has progressed naturally, albeit slowly. All in all it has been a very good series.

Great story, more episodes please

Really enjoyed this, build up has been top notch, can't wait for the next episode

Great series... I cannot wait to read the next story in this.

Wonder if they are going to post the pictures of them playing together....

More please

Did you change this from Steve's p.o.v. to Arlene's? There seem to a lot of occasions where "her" and "my" keep getting confused.

You just lost me, I dont care what happens after this, forcing someone into swinging is a deal breaker for me. it would mean Marriage over.

I liked the story, I like the charactors, but the story got corrupted. didnt bother reading any further.

It has taken a while to get there, but you did. The back and forth emails got pretty tedious, but the swapping was well worth it.

The grammatical issues were somewhat distracting and kept you from a 5.

The only natural emotions represented in this story were disgust and repulsion.