All Comments on 'Society Ch. 01'

The initial "cuteness" of inserting "mumsy" and "smoochies" in the narrative style was mildly off-putting and a little distracting but it soon moved into a good solid setup with an interesting premise. Exposing the thoughts and feelings adds to the overall tension and feel of the story.

I loved this. The build up was good and the cuckquean aspect perfectly executed x