All Comments on 'Solidarity Pt. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Well, this has promise!

Very hot - keep it cumming!

Rye

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donaldelliott11donaldelliott11over 6 years ago
Good start

The plural of "guy" is "guys", not "guy's". You have an apostrophe where you shouldn't many times in the story. I'd be happy to proofread for you before you post more chapters.

Don

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