All Comments on 'Son of Sleep Ch. 02'

Great

I am very happy that you decided to continue this story instead of letting it die like many of your other stories. Once you do come to a close on this story it would be nice to see you go back and continue some of your other stories like book of lust. Just keep writing we all appreciate it. :)

Looking forward to more from these characters. Thanks!

Loved it, keep it up!! :)

keep it up

Well done! I great chapter to follow up the 1st! Thank you!

Can’t wait to see where this goes!

Love your storys

Endless possibilities , interested to see where to next

Very nice follow-up

It has the potential to be great, but it's not quite there yet.

I was expecting a bit more of a guilt trip concerning Paige, if indeed she is his only friend (as heavily as we need to suspend our disbelief for that to happen), it seems that he'd value that a heck of a lot more.

Specially considering she's the only person in the entire school that is even civil to him.

I could understand the first sex scene in his room, but anything more than that turns him into a user who abuses his power with no moral limitations... Personally, makes me not like him.

Great reading it

Love it

Can't wait to see where this goes next. I'm really enjoying this series.

Hanging on every word. Please continue ~

But I gave you a nice solid 4 stars. Great workin, looking forward to the next chapter.

That was Great

He's a Demi-God let him have his day. He obviously deserves it after everything he's been through.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Then I wish I hadn't. The only reason for that is I saw that it was titled a 2 part series. Plenty of meat left on the bone to end it now.

Unconscious sex is not consensual sex; sounds a lot like rape to me. I'm @71 yrs.,

somewhere between 65 and 70 women and maybe still counting. I hope I would never stoop so low, nor launch a protagonist with this type of character flaw.

Your writing and English usage is much above average ,for this site.

The last one to comment doesn't get it. Mind control sex is unconscious sex. It's like when commentators thrash stories in the nonconsent/reluctant section. If you don't like mind control or nonconsent stay out of those sections. That's why I stay out of the gay stories.

Personally I like the direction this story is taking. Keep it up.

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Your story is continuing along nicely, with one glaring slippage - After taking off her black panties and cuming on Paige's tummy he threw her panties across the bedroom and went to the washroom to retrieve a wet cloth to wipe her clean. He then failed to bring back the damp cloth, or retrieve her panties and get them back on her, so she wouldn't notice she had just been screwed. But when he did her again later, she had her panties back on! Careful with your telling!

Not bad...

not sure about this, or score I initially gave it-5...think I would change if I could...

the little voice in back of his head-yeah he's definitely taking advantage of his best, and only friend...

didn't do anything to earn his new power, and now thinking very piggy

going to continue, see if he uses his new power for good...

I'd give you a 5 just because you seem to be the only person on this site who knows the difference between prone and supine.

Cree Galt

How was his entire life turned upside down? Stop crying dude. Not sure I like where this is going. Screw who ever but they don’t remember

Decently written, but the fact that he is abusing the only person that stood by him through the rest of the shit going on in his life is a dick move. Sure, be vindictive with those who tortured you, but not your best friend. Hoping this turns around in the coming chapters as this MC is losing his appeal.

Have to say that taking advantage of and effectively raping the only person who stood by you, makes you a right piece of work.

Agreed with James Duncan's comment. On top of that... How boring and unskilled must you be at sex to actually fantasize about a dead fish?

Interesting take, I identify with the protagonist and wonder if my actions would be similar in the same situation

How low must your self-esteem be if you fantasize about a woman incapable of thought and self actualization? Jesus, that's nearly as pathetic as cucks...

So, i hate to be That Guy, but "...her outfit didn't just FLAUNT the dress code, it demolished it." is, in fact, wrong.

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"Flaunt" would mean her outfit was withing the dress code, and called attention to it.

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The word you ant is "flout"...

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OTOH - fun story

The story is alright. But I'm not keen on how the MC is treating his best friend. He shifted pretty quick from caring about her to using her.

Fun.

Just discovered this story an am loving it!