All Comments on 'Son's Manifestation'

A new style of presentation. Like it.

What crap! You really think this can happen in India where you say this story has been set?

Perhaps this would read better were you to take these thoughts and write a story. Your note points could be your outline. The progress would afford you the opportunity to write prose, rather than bullets.

You have a vengeful outline which displays animosity for your mother.

In my humble opinion, his is a difficult style to garner good ratings. Writing S&M, and posting as such might get you more acceptance.

a good experiment but a bad story

HOTTTTTTTTTTTTT

I love stories that involve humiliation especially on family members and I enjoyed this

Hope you make more

Dirty Shit

It read it again. Take it seriously, you need to learn the art of story telling. Your work looks like babbling of your desires only.