by livvylaine
so regardless of the comments made by others, this story did it for me. I just wish I'd been able to be as bold (and skilled) as this young lady, with a certain teaching assistant named Jack. Sigh.
Agree with the others. Phrasing and spelling are glaring errors. The story line is kind of fun though. Consider this a first draft and build on it. It could be a very hot little story.
The writing, phrases and phrasing were pretty ho-hum. Always, always reread and then have someone else check for errors, omissions and misused words. As noted, spelchek is not trustworthy. Not too bad, in your case but is a jaring note when reading a story. Try some more.
Do you EVER read your typing? The misspelled words will pass spellcheck but have no meaning in your sentences. It makes the story very lame.