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Click here"And hot toddies. And jacuzzis with jets you can point right there."
"And bedrooms with soft king-size beds."
"Yes. Or one of those places with rope courses and zip lines ..."
"And rustic, bare-bones cabins with cozy hard double beds ... or tents..."
"With cozy air mattresses."
"And you can protect me from bears."
"And from snakes ..."
"No, no, remember? We are going to handle snakes together."
"Together."
They stood in the warm, late morning sun, bodies pressed together, imprinting the feeling of lips, hands, breasts with tight nipples, hip bones that crushed against each other, and sexes, now hidden but once open, moist and blooming with passion.
A quiet walk back to the cars. A sweet kiss. A last reluctant squeeze of hands, and Emily and Susan returned to their cars.
On the road, traveling in different directions, each cranked the radio extra loud and screamed the lyrics to favorite songs out the open August windows, drowning out a dark night with a billion stars.
- COMMENTS
pcman19503 months agoWhat a tour de force as far as this male lesbian wannabe is concerned. I've read many of onehitwanda's stories – which are truly fine, but SPWYSL is in a niche of its own imo. Your ability to weave an intense sensual scene is remarkable and, I think, more deeply visceral than many of onehitwanda's. In my view the opinion of okami1061 is off base with regard to her description of Emily as a callow user. As old friends, both women knew of their respective current situations and, as old friends, their platonic love morphed into a deep spiritual & sexual connection through the unique circumstances of the retreat. Further, Emily encourages Susan to explore her lesbian tendencies with the concurrent promises of future rendezvous to further their new, deep connection.
At any rate, you have a new follower and a 5+fave for this story. Thanks for your creativity and passion.
nogravyabout 1 year agoWell, I don't fully subscribe to Okami's criticism about Emily being a user, but I must say that there does seem to be a change in her state of mind and outlook in the last few pages of the story. All that aside, I can only say that I found the characters well-defined otherwise, realistic, and the plot unique and rather magnetic. I thoroughly enjoyed the reading experience it afforded me, and so must award it five stars.
LargoKittabout 1 year agoAuthorAfter reading the story Jetsam by onehitwanda, a title on the list of Okami's Favorites, I understand why Okami1061 trashed me a bit. I am still learning that a romance story gets so much of its heat from the reluctance, the hesitations, the self-doubt; even in the face of two people who are going nuts for each other. I'm working on how to make the sex scenes very real and hot but more beautiful and subtle. onehitwanda is masterful at this. Okami1061, thanks for the good crit.
okami1061about 1 year agoI think the point of this story missed me.
Throughout, it felt like a marvelous emotional odyssey via a complex and meaningful culture few people (at least in the US) have any clue about. It was so emotionally described, and that's the way I experienced it. I felt the connections were far more than physical.
And yet, in the end, it was just plain old fucking. And quite shallow at that, considering they're planning do it again, presumably, with no more meaning. How in the world can that not destroy Susan? What a fucking user Emily turned out to be. She clearly cared nothing for Susan; any cunt would have done as well. The best thing Susan can do is write her off as a friend and go back to her own world wiser for the experience. She is definitely no friend to Susan.
And, I'm left with, "Why did I bother to read this?" Pure masturbation, in multiple senses of the word.
ImNIndyalmost 4 years agoThis is a descriptive masterpiece and I love full descriptive detail that I can live in, while transported into the story. This is the first of your stories I have read. Now I will put all of other’s stories on hold until I read all of yours.
