All Comments on 'Spying on Lillian'

Wtf was that ending... lol... will he wake up from the nightmare?

Anyway, quite great. Only not sure if present tense was needed and justified, it reads a bit awkward here

.... spoilt by the ending.

If you're going to write fetish erotica, the fetish needs to be the main event. Don't just shove it into a couple paragraphs at the end. It feels forced and unnatural.