All Comments on 'Steve and Mrs. Carin'

Than the other version

Your other tale that you submitted is virtually identical, with the exception of the description of the mother, one being bbw one being svelte. While the fantasy is interesting, duplicating your tale is a big no-no.

You need to develop more than just slightly different characters to stretch out as an author, however I have to give you props as I am unable to string together the text myself to make believeable characters (which is why I have not submitted anything myself).

Keep trying please, as I feel you have things to share that we would like to read.

3/5

This fantasy is so hot. It's exactly what I'd like to do to my nephew's friends. Those boys need proper training and I'm just the woman to do it! Making plans...

Very well done!

***Thanks for the read.