All Comments on 'Stockings in the Pews 02 - Mrs. Thomas'

Well that was bad. Gave up half way down (out of 1400 words...). The breaks in paragraphs were disjointed at times, but the killer was the constant flipping back and forth with the tense from past to present.

If you want people to read and appreciate your effort, show you appreciate theirs by taking the time to run it through editing software and proof reading at the very least.

Should be 1* but as it's only your 3rd story, 2*

Comments? None...1*

I do like the premise of these stories and am hoping you are able to improve your writing as you continue. the portion of the story that you built up to - Johnny's visit - seemed to just suddenly be happening and then over in a very short time.

Perhaps you could find a volunteer editor as there are many in the forums and they could help you to correct the grammatical and tense issues as well as helping you to develop a rhythm and flow for your stories.

Keep at it, at least you are trying. Unlike some of the "anonymous" trolls that lurk on this site.!

Bad, really bad. 1*

Excellent this is moving along nicely and who doesn't want to fuck the vicars wife !!

I suppose that you can find someone who will like anything. Even this.

I liked this it could easily go a few more chapters

Keep up the good effort I like where this story is going

Get an editor. Change of tendes and misuse of quotation marks makes the story hard to read.

Not horrid, but sort of odd.

Hubby gonna cave and allow her to fuck her little boy toy?

I think that when you wrote layered you meant lair

isn't this a fetish story? Maybe not, since I couldn't finish it. But as soon as it started focusing on stocking, I thought, who gives a fuck about stocking? Oh, a person who is really turned on by the concept of a woman's stockings. I[m not expert, but isn't that a fetish?

Whatever. Thanks for the very limited effort.

this story was fucking sickkk bro i liked it nice

****WOW that was a good one. One of the best stories I have read this morning. If that's it fine, but would really like a follow-up!! Thanks for sharing!!

I can't believe some actually thought this was a good story. I guess even the sewer rats must have something to read. No accounting for taste.

Check the phrase "audio both." I think you meant "audio booth."

THIS STORY WAS LISTED BEFORE THIS DATE ALREADY. WHY THE REPEAT?

Unsure when I submitted the 3rd story in this series this story showed up as pending as well. I thought it was odd. I was merry happy enough it was back to being published and didn't look into it further.

Husband was in his 'basement layer', should be 'basement lair'

'plum dripping lips' sounds like a UTI is on the way. 'Plump', perhaps?

'audio both' has not been corrected in over 7 months, so I'll re-mention.