All Comments on 'Stories We Ruined Together Pt. 07'

Am enjoying this “slow burn” largely because of the character development. Interesting and often thoughtful to “watch” Lizzie engage with herself and Ed not to mention others (in this case Ed’s roommates/friends). She followed Brian’s advice — was brave and enjoyed herself. Falling asleep after dinner is unusual especially around new acquaintances and equally unusual Lizzie did not appear embarrassed — maybe she is growing her self-confidence and/or others made her feel at ease. Maybe I am projecting how I would feel. Pretty obvious I am caught up in her journey — you make it easy to pause and reflect on your fiction.

So many possibilities! Where is this story going? Now I'm at the end of the published chapters I am going to have to wait until you publish the next chapter. So looking forward to the further adventures of Lizzie and Ed.

A lonely Brit writer named Lizzie

By a book-loving man is made dizzy

A list they compose

To polish her prose

And the sexy pursuit keeps them busy.

5 stars

Love the story so far (of course). Still having trepidations about the ending, but anyway.

As your long lost (and obviously late) editor here is another small typo (or maybe not). Do you use "flour" as the plural for "flower"?

Here's the passage:

"Nice to meet you too. Normally people call me Lizzie. Not that I actually care either way." We didn't shake hands, instead did that awkward little wave, which I really don't like. But she was holding two glasses so there wasn't much choice anyway. My first impression of her was that she was beautiful. Stood there in a short white dress adorned with colourful flours..."