All Comments on 'Strangers in the Night'

by kmorrin

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
first sentence

It's 'pounding bass', not 'pounding base'.

From a Bass player. :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Good but needs editing

Good basic story. Editing would help a lot. Keep writing.

PrfsrPrfsrabout 10 years ago
Needs a touch up

First paragraph uses both past and present tense, and when referring to music the word is "bass" not "base". There is another time when you went to past tense. Perhaps you should read your story before you post it.

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