by Jenny_Wren
Not sure why the 1 out of 5... I think it's very nicely written and, though I see the vague confusion, isn't it just a tale about someone giving a blowjob on the train? Not rocket science...=]
I'll stay anonymous too :) though I'm actually the writer...
Confusing? Ah, okay. Maybe it's not great literature, but I wrote it initially as a tale for a mate, who enjoying it and suggested I submitted it. He was obviously wrong :)
That's why the change in person. Maybe it should simply have stayed as a drrrrty email.
Thanks - with a rating of 1 out of 5, erm, I suspect my literary career is over ;)
... never happened to me when I used to use this very train.
Nice story. Can we have another chapter, or one based on the same character?
I liked the general idea of it all but I'm very confused by the style of it. Who exactly is telling the story?
But you went from the 3rd person for him to the 2nd person by the end of the story. I stopped reading. Keep on writing.