All Comments on 'Strangers on a Train'

But you went from the 3rd person for him to the 2nd person by the end of the story. I stopped reading. Keep on writing.

I liked the general idea of it all but I'm very confused by the style of it. Who exactly is telling the story?

... never happened to me when I used to use this very train.

Nice story. Can we have another chapter, or one based on the same character?

I'll stay anonymous too :) though I'm actually the writer...

Confusing? Ah, okay. Maybe it's not great literature, but I wrote it initially as a tale for a mate, who enjoying it and suggested I submitted it. He was obviously wrong :)

That's why the change in person. Maybe it should simply have stayed as a drrrrty email.

Thanks - with a rating of 1 out of 5, erm, I suspect my literary career is over ;)

Not sure why the 1 out of 5... I think it's very nicely written and, though I see the vague confusion, isn't it just a tale about someone giving a blowjob on the train? Not rocket science...=]

I like it.