All Comments on 'Stud or Dud?'

There is an old saying from when I was in the military: All Preparation, No H'in. Great back story, characters, and flow. However, why on earth would someone write this and post it on an Erotic story site, when the sex is only briefly mentioned with 1 or 2 sentences? 6 pages of story, and maybe only 20 lines describing the sex....

Your story overall is not bad, but every character constantly delivers these long speechs. There carefully worded speeches are longer and more detailed than the sex! They ruin any illusion the characters could be real even for a fantasy. Please edit your characters dialogue more carefully or the reader may thing your stud is exaggerating and then your storyline fails. We look forward to more.

boring, boring, borinbg