by Aidan Blackthorn
yell Oh Goddess when they are coming, but the rest of the story was pretty good. Looking forward to the next chapters.
Great start, most enjoyable.
Good writing, spelling, syntax, flow, though I spotted a few typo's which a Word checker, Grammatica or an editor ought to catch.
Thanks! I'm lustily awaiting more!
The construction on this is very fluid, and it reads exceptionally well. You craft excellent stuff, and I look forward to more.
Yes, this submissin reads very well and except for a couple of phrases shows promise of a well constructed story. Waiting eagerly for the follow-uo
I know this story is quite old but if the author is still reading comments this story was excellent. It is too bad there is no Ch. 02. :-(