All Comments on 'Succubus' futa transformation'

I was so confused I thought this was a story about Kyle and Hannah? I might have just misunderstood.

Great job!!!! I would recommend an editor (if you check out the highest rated authors on here they have them) because one would help you catch, tense changes mid paragragh, using the wrong words, and the fact that your general story structure needed a little more detail (Ok Lilith helps Kevin and Hannah but why? Will you give us insight into their desires?). Honestly, please keep writing and sharing your stories with us!

It's rare to find a demon story where the demons have proper demonic tongues, long and pointy. Also a big fan of the "contagion" TFs, and the aphrodisiac body fluids. I like your taste (and anything demon-related, really).

The story is decent for the most part. My biggest complaint is how short and quick the final sex scene is. It seems like a long build up, but falls a little at the end. I would suggest have it be a little longer and more detailed.

He thought it would comfort him after his strange 'date'. He ordered a double scoop, chocolate cone which soon made a mess on his hand.

"Mmm... I better lick that up!" he thought as he licked the hand that wiped away Lillith's cum. "Oh shit!" he exclaimed as he remembered the incident but continued licking off his hand because it all tasted so good!

When he got home he looked in the mirror and thought, "Hey, my eyes look a little yellow... "

Enjoyed your story very much! More please!

What happened to Kyle. Story had a lot of promise, then quickly you dropped Kyle out of the picture. Are there supposed to be more chapters? 5 becomes 2

Hannah should have stayed with Kyle during her transformation and gave him the demon bug,so they could be futa sucubii and ultimately infect others by passing on there seed to more.Honestly I think Lilith should have turned Kyle too so he/she could join Hannah as a hellspawn minion for Lilith and they could live a life of sex and recruitment to Liliths army of sex minions,oh what a life to live.Good story but could've been better.

Lots of good things (transformative cum, aphrodisiac saliva) but the writing could use more work. Also why include Kyle at all ? Either give hime a role in the story or drop him