All Comments on 'Succubus Master Pt. 04'

You have a good story going and your writing improves with every chapter.

There are some grammar issue here and there that breaks the immersion, but other than that you're doing great. Keep it up!

FWIW the correct form in Latin would be "panis dulcis," and it would translate to "sweet bread."

Love this series!

5 Stars!

Would have given 5 stars but saying Canada socialize medical care 2nd best thing. Is a joke.

"After all, no one should blame the prostitute for committing adultery, but rather the spouse that cheats."

So true.

Over the years i have known - and hung with - several Working Girls, most of whom our other friends didn't know were in the life.

In my story "Winston's Witch", i have some meditations on how "Polite Society" trats working girls...

I’m going to miss the collars

Still need a proofreader, so many errors and wrong words that makes no sense in the sentences they are used in, but in general it’s a good story.

simple error: Rayna got the command to orgasem when he errupts by her blowjob - and Elli is linked to feel what Rayna feels - so Elli would simply make an accident while orgasming by driving the car. Or, some commands only last temorary. By the way: was it Rayna, Reyna or Rayne?

Nice story, some points got too far like the rather violent "breaking or destroing her" stuff - if you like or love someone, why would you do something like that or misname submissive tendencies to something that horrible? But ok, beside that nice entertainment.