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Pretty good read. Now that Tallon has sunk his talon into Aunt Sophie he needs to spread his wings & dedicate his summer break to making Aunt Sophie into Mommy. Would be a Shame for 2 such fertile individuals to remain un-bred. Happily waiting for next chapter. 5☆

I am working on the next chapter guys! Thank you for the support!

Editing may help some

How about descriptions of Aunt Sophie and Tallon?

Got to give us readers some kind of mental picture.

Is Sophie a 23 year old shaved blonde with big tits?

Or maybe a middle aged woman who doesn't know how attractive she is.

And not much dialogue, character development, or interactions before they have sex...she drinks a lot, passes out in the tub, he gets her out of the tub, and she's ready for sex?

A lot of grammar and spelling errors.