by Geilemeid
I liked it very well. Proof reading would have clarified a few thoughts though.
What happens when she picks up a nasty STD?
1 star
A lonely wife in our little community went on line and met the man of her dreams. She agreed to meet him in a city an hour's drive away. Imagine her embarrassment when she arrived at the hotel restaurant and found her dull, boring husband waiting for her.
Ok, so grammar was a limiting factor but content more than made up for that . I throughly enjoyed how the climax of the story built, closely followed my own stroking of my cock. The idea that consenting adults can't have responsible sex, as commented, is absurd. If all parties are clean, DDF, playtime can be so exceptionally freeing. Live out your fantasies carefully with those you trust. My partner and I have been doing this for years neither of us have "health issues" and expect verifiable proof from our partners. Looking forward to more submissions. Excellent work.
No sane man wants to touch her with a festering swamp of diseases in her cunt. This was beyond stupid.
What sane man want to put his dick in this sluts hole after it has been filled with two lots of semen minutes before, his pea sized brain is definitely in his cock end.
words that could have been used in a story that may actually have had a chance at being worth the effort to read
unlike this tripe
I sincerely hope your English has improved IF you choose to continue writing in English. If you don't, don't sweat it. You did TRY. Respect given.
No thanks, this one was bad enough
If English is your second language you have a real aptitude for languages because your story is better written than most by native English speakers. Even though I didn't particularly enjoy the subject matter, I sure enjoyed your writing!
The guy who complained should try writing one in French, which I assume is your native tongue--I liked the story and the writing did make it hard to read in spots but keep writing because we have so few women on this site. d633
so don't try composing a whole story in it until you master it.