All Comments on 'Swim Team Ch. 10 - Finding A Way'

A bit of a throwback to the first chapter where Bret advanced on Keith in his sleep. I'd like to see how reaction in the morning

More Keith and Bret please!! Bret needs to be plowed by Keith's straight dick!!

Gay

It’s a good solid story. I’ve been looking at many of the comments and just started reading your story over the past few days. I disagree with the complaints that the pimping situations inclusion were inappropriate or not cool. This is important for your plot’s development and obviously like murder mysteries, SVU tv shows, etc., the stories are horrible but they happen a more often than we care to acknowledge and child trafficking is even worse. I was a little disappointed that Jake instead of Stanley took Bret’s virginity. I was thinking more of a boyfriend relationship was going to develop there by now but maybe with Stanley and Jake having sex once a week, maybe Keith is a better fit. I don’t know if you have an editor, but there are some errors in character continuity and some typos that are significant to the plot. Closure would be good for Bret and his father, prosecution of Dwayne, and a permanent living site established for Bret for the rest of high school. I don’t know if you plan to develop the story up to or into college, but that could be interesting.

Please update!! Dying to know more!

Please update soon :( i've been blue-balled by this story for months already!

I just started reading this series and think it’s wonderful. I have written a couple myself although it has been a while and need to start once again. I took a break from writing these to write a regular novel.

If you need or want help with editing, let me know. I would be glad to help.

This story has potential...a tweak here and there with character development and confused about Paolo finding and rescuing Bret from Dwayne...