All Comments on 'Taking The Wind Out Of Their Sails'

What A bitch to be sure,

It turns out that she was full of manure.

Her husband was Quick with his brain,

he went home With out any shame!!

5

This was moderately funny at the end, but I am not really a fan of the 750 word stories, especially when not forewarned.

Good beginning, but incomplete. So, only 2 *.

Half a story.

2/2.5

Complete it and I will add 2.5 more

Nothing really to recommend this, no plot, no characterization, no action, no twist or surprise, no reason to read it really.

Good on you! Serves them both just right. Five stars.

Not bad, but a 750 word story not always result well! That's the case. It's dificult that kind of stories don't miss details...3*

Good snippet but doesn’t work as a full story. There’s no depth of characters or plot to immerse the reader in. 3.7*

I enjoy reading the pointlessly nasty, insulting comments then seeing that every time, the commenter has no stories of their own to offer.

Anyway, good contribution to the 750 word challenge. You succeeded.

Fun to read, but I'm interested what happened next

I also want to know what happened next, but this story was tight, neat and complete without anymore!

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐!

Too short.

Complete as is, their story is over. Good job, I've no interest in learning anything more about Sherry or Greg.

whatever...

Well written, tight story.

Maybe a follow up from her side, providing the backgroung and outcome....

That was very good. A husband thinking on his feet and getting out of a bad situation. I'm sure a certain group of readers will hate this story. But its your story write whatever you want.

I have never thought "...and everyone will know you are a cuckold" was ever much of a threat. It's better to be a trusting fool than a lying cheat.

Damn too short

Good start

You had a good start, now finish it. You have a guy who is quick on his feet. Let's see what he does and how the wife reacts.

I'm not a fan of the "humiliate the cuck" stories or wife "springing it on the husband" like that.

I could see a wife eventually wanting someone other than her husband. But it takes two real a-holes to do it so blatantly and trying to humiliate him in that public context.

So, at least it wasn't a violent BTB story, and I'll give it a 4.

Pretty good tease of a longer story.

Okay. D

A 750-word story should be read with the understanding that the author set out to do the best possible job within the length limitations—in other words, read for what it is, a 750-word story, not a failed piece of a longer story. This particular instance seems to me to have a beginning, (his stated reluctance to attent yet another quarterly party), a middle (her revelation that she's going to leave with her office husband), and an end (the husband's public declaration that the office husband has won the lottery). Well done.

If one doesn't like 750-word stories, it's disingenuous to complain in the comments that the story was too short, unfinished, whatever. If one doesn't like them, one shouldn't read them.

Short, punchy and satisfying ending, great work in 750 words.

Fast ball down the middle. BOOM! Right out of the park. Nice work. Thank you.

750 words but I would have liked a little bit more of the aftermath

I wish there was an aftermath to what happened after he left

God, how I fucking hate these 750 word stories. Wish the author that originally introduced them was slapped in the face for each one that gets posted as punishment.

I hope she likes her new life.

It seems you fofgot the 2 last 750 word sequals required to finish it

That company would be sued into oblivion

Another example of the classic and abused Feb-Suks tale, but ending with a rare and immediate reaction from an husband with a male brain (almost all of the feb-suks derivations follow the femdom cheating-cuck-raac line, sometimes adding lots of psycho-blabbering to make more acceptable the impossible). So, short take and right to the point tale, with the due payback to a narcissistic bitch wife: 5 full stars for this anti-cuck tale.

So all that time she has cheated or was this to be the first?

👍🏻 😂 *****

That‘s not a story for 750 words. Sorry Guy. Two stars

It is a decent start of a story. It is a shame you were lazy and didn’t finish writing.

Short and sweet

one of the few shorts like this, that I actually liked. 4*

So your user name is IWroteThis... What exactly did your WRITE? not a story, barely a scene from a story, barely a snippet as someone else said.

Bigfundrew, I don’t think you thought through your insult to people that don’t like your stories. Do you REALLY think it’s wise to fill LW with more terrible stories so people retain the right to post their thoughts? This story was ok, I see these short stories as a cop out for someone that can’t think through a whole story, or have any understanding of how it feels to truly get betrayed by the last person on earth you’d expect. 2 stars

Wow great 750 word story. Haha like the end, where he’ll drop her stuff off at his house.

5🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Fun little story.

So many obviously stupid commenters with high falutin' nics. It's 750 words, maybe a White Castle slider (a tiny hamburger) and yet people comment as though it should have been a multi course meal. 750's are pretty easy to spot, if all you're going to do is complain they're too short go read a chuck tale or something else more to your liking.

I for one thought this one of the more clever ways to deal with this scenario and have enough imagination to fill in a few blanks.

Well done working within the constraints of the format

☆☆☆☆☆

The STRONG implication was there that hubby had found out about wifey’s office behavior (“finish” boxing her stuff; the INSTANT and almost unemotional reaction), but the 750 limit precluded any real confirmation of this.

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Readers will just have to presume that Sherry’s future will not be too rosy. Such are these flash stories.

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4 ****

This is one that I wish continued.

Was a good short story its about time these husbands are able to think fast and show some back bone , nicely done

The biter bit!

Nicely done. Short and effective

Don't listen to the haters. Very good complete 750 word story.

To all of those with kind words on my first story here, thank you.

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To those who think it's incomplete, I'm sorry I disappointed you.

The story that came to me was about events at an office party. No matter how I was inspired to tweak it (and I did tweak it with three major revisions and a ton of small edits), it always started and stopped within that one room. While I probably could have merged it with another story in my WiP bin to "complete" it, the original word count made it a great candidate for a 750 word project.

I liked him turning the embarrassment on the "bull," but the story was too short.

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@Tx77, the story has 750 word tags.

You tease.

If hubby dumps her, he is missing a great opportunity to enjoy having a very hot wife and all the benefits that bring to a marriage. I hope he comes to his senses and comes down off his high horse.

Like everyone else this needs to be made into a longer version.

Good short retelling of a similar story. However in the 750 category it was well spaced and flowed vey well.

Well played! 5 stars DMW aka Sumnut96

It is patently absurd to demand an extension of a 750-word story. Done is done.

Well fit into the format. Sometimes a story doesn't need to be verbose to get the point across.

Nice touch thanks for sharing.

Good little story..

well she sure wasn't worth fighting for.

that was perfect IMHO.

Wish it was longer.

Needs finishing!

Wham. Bam. Thank you Ma'am!

5

Meh. Three stars.

JPB

Home run!

That was great, I like a fast talker.

Now that's thinking on your feet! 5 stars

Great flash story

Short and sweet! I liked it. I bet they didn't see that coming!

Well done, but, of course if all 'we need to talk' stories had this obvious of a result, the sub-genre would disappear.

"The STRONG implication was there that hubby had found out about wifey’s office behavior (“finish” boxing her stuff; the INSTANT and almost unemotional reaction), but the 750 limit precluded any real confirmation of this."

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Well, that's not at all what I intended. With it specifically saying he was concerned but saw nothing else to make him suspicious, the way he turned around Greg wanting Randy to eat Greg's creampie, and the reference to his quick wit, I thought it was pretty clear he was making it all up as he went along. In an earlier version I actually had it close with him walking out while making a phone call to kick off what he said had already happened, but I decided it was unnecessary and didn't fit the story flow. Plus, I liked the new closing line a lot better.

As for him being unemotional, he had been on edge about it for a while, so it wasn't a complete surprise.

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"Another example of the classic and abused Feb-Suks tale,"

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I don't really see this as being related to February Sucks and I didn't use it for inspiration. Yes, there is a cheating wife and a semi-public event that includes dancing, but this was not a previously faithful wife being star struck and running off for a once in a lifetime night with a celebrity. This was a wife looking to escalate her office affair to outside the office on an ongoing basis.

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"That company would be sued into oblivion"

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Maybe, if they paid for rooms used after they left the dance, but probably not. Even if they did get sued, as you can sue anybody for anything, the odds of anybody winning a judgement against them is pretty small. The only hope is a payoff to avoid the bad publicity.

Dang.

What now?

Does the ending of this tale telling me to beg for a swquel? Or is it goading me to give a snarky comment?

Nice hit right in the nuts!

It's nice and short. It took in all people's accounts and it ended well.

Good start, but I'd really like to see a longer, more developed ending

I soooo want more to this story, well played sir..

Great job !

Great story!

Good story. But I want to read about the aftermath.

@ju8streading - no woman you're in an exclusive relationship is worth fighting, or even otherwise competing for. If she's the low quality type who will betray you, better to find out early and jettison the anchor.

These little dicked boys who write and read these types of stories get to live out their only true masculine moments while reading these. It must really take a feminine male to get off on these ridiculous farces.

Well, that was dumb.

Great start but feels unfinished.

A cute setup. I hope you write a story some day, I think you might have talent.

This needs a better ending

Amazingly Unrealistic. 3 stars

Need another chapter

***** Super!

5 stars - this was a perfect, snappy comeback that caught the ASSHOLE, SLUT & everyone in the room by surprise.

It is sad to admit that if I were to be confronted with a similar dilemma, the ASSHOLE would already be on the floor bleeding profusely.

Agree with silverthorne, good start but both the bitch and bastard need some more sorting out. How about a quick part two where both are destroyed? I'm hoping the asswipe is married and his wife burns him down in the divorce.

OK . Thanks for the detailed synopsis . Now , where's the story .

Good start but not even a first chapter.

Woefully inadequate, even for a 750 word blip.

I like the story and the way it was crafted. Thanks and look forward to more of your work. Four stars. Leaving room for a 5 star effort.

Embarrass the cunt, her office husband and all the fellow employees for office oragies. Leave her with the worthless Douche Nozzle.

Please keep writing - 5 stars.

Good one! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Too short and if this is a standalone story it is woefully inadequate. Therefore I assume this is just the opening chapter