All Comments on 'Talon Ch. 06'

I've been checking for another chapter because I wanted to see the ending! Thank you so much for writing it. I look forward to Rick's story, can't wait to see how that turns out. I hope alls well with you and you get lots better!

... I enjoyed it very much! Now I just have to read it backwards :/ Why does this always happen to me? :P LOL. Thanks for writing! It was well-worth the time I spent reading it(: <3 Lillian, KR.

for doing it in a rush, as you said. ;) A spell-checker would have taken care of a few things, but nothing really took away from the story. I thought the end felt a bit quick, but I think I need to go back and re-read everything together, it really is a good story. And I hope you do continue with Rick, and maybe Anna, too.

sound story telling, but in desperate need of an editor. There were so many mistakes, even in the allegedly edited chapters, that it took a lot away from the joy of reading. Still, keep up the good work and get well soon.

Sorry I still need to create an account on here to leave more than an Anonymous comment. But i think the story is great. Didn't really notice or care if there was any spelling errors. Just take care of yourself as having surgery sucks i had my gallbladder out thursday so i know it hakes a bit to heal. I hope you do well.

debbie g

to enjoy it. It would have been much better to have it edited and make us wait longer. In every paragraph there was at least one spelling or grammar error. It took away from your storyline immensely.

if you do not i will find out where u live and tear your throat out. JKJK but pleas get the story out

GAH! Don't end it there! Please? I know you need to do Rick's story but it'd be great if you could continue Talon's as well... I love it. Please? ^_X

OH MY GOD THIS IS ONE OIF THE BEST IVE EVER READ

So, I really do like the story line it was well thought out and worded. However, YOU REALLY NEED TO USE AN EDITOR!!! It really interferes with the enjoyment of the story when you are constantly reading errors!! Don't half ass it! If you're going to come up with a story line as great as that have enough pride in your work to have it edited and make sure you get it right!! You're an awesome writer and if you had every chapter edited it would make it truly phenomenal!!

Think about it! You should have as much love for your stories as your readers do!!

Great story, but now I'm waiting on Rick's story. when is it going to come out?

i really liked this story slightly rushed and think you could continue on with the story ie after the recovery meeting the family all that craic!plus have a slight suspicion that randy is a gay wolf and maybe rick is too??could be way off the mark like but thats my thoughts, please continue with the stories.

Max

Pls do complete this story...its been months.....

I hope you are doing okay... God bless.

The story between Tina and Talon was awesome, thanks. :D

I hope you are going to continue with Ricks story. I love this story.

Keep writing!

keep writing .... love the story

please continue this story. i want to know what happens with rick!

Good story,but you need to spellcheck words,"fraise"? for phrase,and others,but the overall story is very enjoyable,keep up the good work.

ok, i lied earlier when i said the story was good.. i simply cant get past all the errors.. it makes you sound ignorant.. thats all..

Okay, I really did like this series. Even with all the errors. I sort of just corrected them in my mind and moved on. Apart from that it was a great series!!

However I have one small question..

"Talon, I love you and I couldn't stand the thought of you bein' killed cause of me. So instead of riskin' both of our deaths I attacked and made damn sure that if I was goin' to die, you would live."

Did she forget that he had told her earlier on that if one dies, the other dies, too??

You really need an editor, please, you have great ideas but the spelling is horrible. Also you might benefit from the editing with regard to sentence structure and flow also. Keep writing though, you'll get better! Thank you for the story.

Lord have mercy,,,,get an editor or proof reader,,,good story,,but made my head hurt with the improper word usage...and figuring it out,,,,keep writing,its well worth reading,,,but PLEASE GET AN EDITOR...

countrygirlfla, if you're going to crit someone for needing editing, you should at least make sure your comment is written with half-way decent style - what's with all the commas?

I wonder if he is gay?

Great story! Where is rick's story? Another site?

Have ever finished Rick's story?

I thought this was a great.story and was looking forward to reading Ricks story but I see it's been awhile now since the end of Talons story and was wondering if you were planning on still writing Ricks story?

i would love to know why she never got around to ricks story...trs

THE STORY IS WONDERFUL DESPITE THE SPELLING MISTAKES.