All Comments on 'Tamed Pt. 08: The Invite'

I'm looking forward to reading more. The story seems well thought out and is highly entertaining. My only request is that you are more careful with your perspective pronouns. I definitely want more from this story line.

Hey! Great story, will you continue it?

Great story, will you continue it?

Too many uses of "you" instead of the female's name; 1 "he" instead of "the", & I forget the 3rd mistake I saw