All Comments on 'Erika Ch. 01'

Wow, very hot, maybe He can give her a facial in the next part

5 Stars, great story, he's a lucky father and she's a wonderful appreciative daughter,

Very hot.... waiting for part 2.

In part 2, can Tamika seduce her mother? Then in part three, just as Mother and Father have promised to divorce, so they can fuck their daughter. Tamika brings them both together for a three way orgy of incestuous debauchery!

Any story ideas are welcome. Am still working out the details for this series.

Yes. This is from my old account. I’ve started writing again after several years . Will add stories which I want to make into larger series now.

Wonderfully written. 5 stars!

Can mother not be involved? She does or something and father/daughter fall in love?

Gotta find your old stuff. Let’s involve the whole family. Hopefully she is a squirter.

"Dad..."

"Tomika...

"Dad...

"Tomika..."

Have they never met before? Do they keep saying each other's name so they won't forget should they meet again?

I see so many people write this way and it's so frustrating.

Stupid shit like this will take your reader out of the story and when they're out, it's not hot anymore.

Go sit in a Starbucks one weekend and listen to people talk to each other. Do they say each other's name in every sentence? No, they dont.

Nice, very VERY nice.

He ripped her thong off of her and offered to buy her all the thongs she wants.

A few paragraphs later, she reached down and pulled her thong off.

Things like that drive me crazy.

Very hot!

I think the words "dad" and "my father" appear in this story more than fuck, tits, and cum do, combined.

The brother is mentioned in passing so really there are only two ppl in the story. Did you think your readers would forget that he was "dad?"

"Do you like my tits dad?"

"Dad do you want to fuck my tits?"

"Dad, can I grab your cock, dad? Please dad? I really want to dad. I want your cum dad. I want to feel it dad. Dad? Dad! Oh dad."

You can cut out 90% of the dads and 95% of my father. And it will make the story 100% more enjoyable.