All Comments on 'Taming the Bunny Ch. 05'

This was unreadable. I have no idea who ia speaking or what they’re saying.

Why in hell would the MC take her back after such BLATANT disrespect????

Conversations flesh out a story, taking it from a simple rote description of events to something more realistic and believable, allowing the reader to become engrossed in the story. Stories that are purely conversation become a distraction, as the reader has to do something the author doesn't: concentrate on which character is saying what. It becomes especially difficult when there are more than two characters. While it is an interesting storyline, it is very difficult to read. A content editor would help a lot, I think.

Nope, Nope, Nope...He has drawn the line and she is twisting him. She has 25% and she will take over his company and he will be out on his ass. There is nothing in this story about being in love. The woman is reprehensible and the guy is a fucking idiot. I'm checking out.

Ok story. Just couldn’t keep up with who was speaking to who

I dislike every character in the story.

This was the worst chapter. Too a matter of fact, racing through the relationships and events too quickly. Again, the “heheh” is annoying. Develop your writing skills so you don’t have to hit readers in the face, forcing the emotions.

No way, this slut is beyond redemption, carry on the the two roomies

Ugh. He took the wife back. No

The dialogue is bizarre, the oncoming RAAC is too obvious. it Spoils the story. If there's an underlying joke here I don't get it.

This is wierd

Turning into a really dumb contrived story.

Good grief are you really this dumb????? Totally a big NOPE!!!!!!!!! Get a clue...........

Sorry, this is just a train wreck.

Dump her for real.

Is it over yet? Thanks for sharing.

all characters seem frail in description even weak in representation, however the financial wording and terms seems in depth, try to make the reader feel the feelings you put in your heroes,,,don't just refer to them use more words to tell the same story color it as you can see it .keep it up

this is a story of betrayal, cheating, despair, partnership, hope and emotional ups and downs,use some words to do just that

What a despicable bunch of people. One would never bring them home to meet your folks. They are all skanks including Mark

Lana is raring to cheat again, she cannot help herself always pushing.

Kick her to the curb.

Wasn't a great story to begin with, but you made it much, much worse by having him get back together with her. No reason to. He doesn't need her.

This may be a rough hard-to-read story , with a fuzzy parameter and difficult formatting. However the authors use of humor was outstanding which was enough to keep me reading to the end . I’ll wager to say that with a better understanding of composition , context and punctuation this author could pump out 5 star stories easily . I’ll give you 3

I don’t get it, she wanted an open marriage and he sad no, then she just fucked this other guy anyway. He just waited for her to finish fucking this guy so she got her open marriage and him like a jack ass took her back, started ok fucked up ending

He’s more a wimp than ever, taking her back after she cheated on him until she tired of her lover.

I dislike both Mark and Lana. Lana is an unrepentant cheating slut. She never really regretted what she did to Mark, just that she didn't get to have her cake and eat it too. Mark is a major simp - he juts takes Lana back with minimal resistance even though he has younger and hotter women falling all over him. I would respect Lana if she was genuinely remorseful and realized the hurt that she caused to Mark. I would respect Mark if he would hold Lana to some semblance of accountability for her own actions. These people all suck.

As much as I liked the original plot line, it falls apart in the way you wrote it, I’m sorry if English isn’t your first language that I haven’t given you enough credit for writing it, but it reads as if a young teenager has done most of the work.

It was headed for a five but the ending sucked. Lana using Anal to convice Mark to let her take another man was a stupid move on both their parts. Mark should have said not no but hell no. The first affair damn near ruined them and she never did learn from her selfish mistake.

Story started out interesting. Then turned to complete bullshit. Too much rhetoric babble. And Lana never suffers. Wish there was a 1/2 star.