All Comments on 'Tatiana Seduces Her Perfect Lover'

I found this story a little confusing and hard to follow. Which parts are fantasy, which parts are dream, and are these parts separate from "reality"? You began well, with good descriptions of the mature matrons' appearance and emotions, but did not support it with descriptive scenes, or a hard plot to follow and to build suspense...Try describing specific events from a specific point of view. That will build power into your narrative. What you have here is a little too unfocused.