All Comments on 'Taylar's Awakening Ch. 02'

This is a good continuation of your first story. It is believable enough and the situations don't come off too heavy handed.

A few notes: You break the first person point of view in a few places. How does Taylar know what Stephie is thinking. I also wanted to know the final price of the heels. In future instalment I hope Tay and Steph don't get to lesbian, Tay and Angela should get more heated. I liked the bit with the dirty feet. You are doing a great job. Don't stop writing. This stuff is gold.

Best of luck and don't stop writing.

really cool story so far, interested where it will go