All Comments on 'Teacher Gets New Lessons Pt. 03'

Feels more like a summary or abridged version of a story. Chapters are rather short. Notice how many paragraphs begin with "I." That gives the tale a machine gun feel, one bullet at a time. "You" is a rather odd notion; why? Overuse of "you" is also distracting. Nevertheless, the overall plot is interesting. Let's see if things improve.