All Comments on 'Teacher Loves the Student Body'

Good story, but for gods sake get an editor

Great first story. Really enjoyed it but....a little bit of constructive criticism. I agree that you need an editor, nothing major, just a few small errors. But to me it felt rushed. This guy has a wonderful, beautiful wife who is wild in bed, a new baby & a great job....why, during ONE school day (what, 8hrs?), would he jeopardize that? No explanation for it. He is around these girls every day & has been doing this job for years. Why is he getting worked up over them now? Maybe if the story took place over a couple of weeks or a month or two. Show these girls slowly wearing him down. Which leads me to the last problem. Too many characters that served no real purpose, very briefly thrown in over the course of the day. Should have fleshed these characters out more than just a physical description. The teacher at lunch made it seem like these girls pick a teacher to crush on & flirt with. This was told, not shown. Again, would have loved more build up & anticipation. This is just my opinion. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Great story, 5-stars.

good story, but distracting spelling mistakes.

You or someone needs to proofread before submitting!!