All Comments on 'Telekinesis Ch. 03'

I like the story so far. It has a little more S&M for my taste. Bondage is fine but causing pain is not my thing, but to each their own. You are doing a good job of going back and forth between past and present, but you may want stay in one or the other a little longer. Don’t want to get whiplash.

Looking forward to the rest of the story!

I agree with the previous commenter that the switch from past to present is too quick sometimes, and gets a little confusing about which girl he's with right now.

Other than that, brilliant writing. Enjoyed it loads.

Rereading this chapter now, I see what you mean. The problem is that I was still new to Literotica, and it has a strict formatting layout that eliminates the spaces usually added to mark the breaks between scenes. I've since learned how to work around that constraint. I think you may find that my later series do better to switch between scenes.