All Comments on 'Tell Me What She's Like Pt. 01'

O know this is a Part 1, but still too short.

Need some more. Great setup, but needs more ever for a part 1

"You" took quite a gamble here. As mentionned, "you" could well have had a much different ending.

Could, perhaps, have been a bit longer however that would only have had "you" completion g with insertion, exactly as outlined.

Besides, how long can "you" (pun intended) last after such an excellent work-up?

Nicely done, good length for the situation AND the desired affects (yes, affects).

Thanks for the feedback! The whole story was written and uploaded at one time, each part is just going through the pending process one at a time. This is my first story story though, so I'll be sure to beef up first chapters going forward.

Excellent story starter!

Personally, I'm hoping the next chapter shifts into SciFi/Fantasy and he becomes the girl she's describing. Oh, the fun an insatiable oral slut could get up to.

Turns out I have read the part 1, before part 2 and found it quite vanilla.

Probably writing in first person would more completely 'sell' the story. Letting the readers vicariously have and enjoy sex with your partner, as if their partner, would be a better fit.

2nd person! Noooooooooo!