All Comments on 'The 22 Year Old College Virgin (fm)'

Hey! I liked the story, I even jerked off to it... but there's something odd about it. Dunno if it was just too many things going on or the constant "chapters". In my opinion, it broke hard the reader's flow and sometimes just for a paragraph or so. Maybe... just have a blank line dividing them, not a full number—it distracts.

Also, I get it that Cate's thing is the being on top and anime thing, but it gets somewhat repetitive during the story. And the whole text, it feels porno-ish. And that's okay, but I think you're a good writer and can do best. Looking forward to find out how the Cat & Jake thing evolves!

Good story, although the end seemed unfinished. Also, ivory is a creamy white and ebony is very dark brown, almost black. It seems the word ivory was used for ebony on the encounter at the frat party.

Fun story but weird use of language. What college kid says"Shat"? Four stars.

I share Jake's frustration with 3-ways.

More to do than I have appendages! :+))

I'd rather focus on YOU!