All Comments on 'The Aftermath Ch. 02'

I loved this chapter. Hope the third will be soooooner rather than later.

In this chapter you made a mistake... During Josh's talk with Jason (who incidentally is the person Sean had his bet with) you had Jason comment about how Sean hadn't told about how Josh had deleted the pictures that proved he had won the bet. If Josh had told that to anyone, but especially Jason, then there would have been no point in destoying the pictures, because he would have exposed the seduction with his own big mouth. However, in your previous chapter, you had Josh very carefully avoid mentioning anything about the photos. Also, the person that Josh had checking on Sean in the previous chapter was named Jeff. I also wonder why Josh's mom's frequent visits to see Sean's mom (where Sean would surely be) weren't a cause for concern?

thanks for finishing 2222's story. is josh's mom planning on doing some son swapping with helen? yes, josh didn't tell jason about the screwing or the pics. was that in 222's story> was josh's mom getting more time with sean at helen's? sorry, but i was hoping josh would get to try his mom. this could be only the start of a great novel on lit. thanks

Your characters talk waaaaaay too long. Nobody talks in huge chunks like that. Also, you've got a problem of not having quotation marks at the end of each character's dialogue. It looks sloppy but could be fixed pretty easily. Not a bad story, but needs a bit of work.

I know you meant well but I personaly do not like the direction the story is taking. Missed big opportunity for great story. Too Bad!!!

helen waiting for the kill.he do her right with mom lead, she his for life.

Please write another chapter...I need to know the next phase of the story.

make helen his slut and mom too.

It seems that way since you have not updated this in over two years. You even said you had chapter 3 already written or inferred it.

My guess is you either got laid off or got too busy since you had to step into another's shoes since they got laid off.

Its a shame either way since I think this is a great storyline.

John

i THINK THAT THIS SERIES NEEDS ONE MORE CHAPTER. I think we need to know more about Helen and Josh and what happens to Helens son .

It has been five years since the last wonderful chapter was posted. Please finish the story that you've committed.

when you will put it ?

DON'T STOP PLEASE FINSIH.......

Later he can fuck his Mom but I would not mind if they skipped this, they are getting along so well now. Of course since she screwed Sean her son deserves a slice, too. Either way will be fine. And he should take up with one or two of the high school girls.

Get Sean taken care of some way, my way would be his getting the crap beaten out of him and that he would elect to live with his father, in that way Helen would need more company by our hero.

Is Josh that stupid? His mom is going over to Sean's house to suposedly spend time with Sean's mother... where has Sean been on these nights???

there was never another chapter

Promises promises

As others pointed out he had his teammate Jeff probing for answers not Jason the guy that Sean made the bet with. In the real story Sean was in the stands with Josh's mom so clearly was not on the baseball team and no allusions to the story being set in the deep south. If it were the notions of incest would not be so vehemently opposed. Still this is such a dismantling of the original story that inspired it you have to ask why it was even composed. That said I'm slightly disappointed we probably won't get Aftermath 3D. Even though it has ventured off so far away from what the original story's author was probably going to do, there are still so many shoes left to be dropped.

good story, anxious to read the suite

Please write chapter

It's a good story. How about a cheating wife with young high school quarterback

I would love to see Josh and Helen get to get together on Mother's day

Simple sequel

Josh and helen fucked. Sean gets cuckolded

END

Now get a life

I would love the read the next chapter of Helen and Josh

I HOPE CHARTER 3 AN 4 JOSEPH AN LOVE STORY TO COMING