All Comments on 'The Architect's Test'

So, you shifted between first and third person. You had two people talking in the same paragraph. For the final line of dialogue, it was unclear who was talking. You didn't reveal much about Zanar's personality or motivations other than the fact he's horny. On the bright side, I didn't see too many typos.

Oh so true, objectively this is VERY bad writing, I'm quite aware of that. It's just kindof horny. Like I say, I don't write this kind of stuff much!