by doc87123
Stories like this make me wish there was someone good enough to pick up the incompletes and finish them. Like an author dedicated to pick up and finish where authors have passed away or just quit the site. It's been 6 years with no other works from this guy and that makes me sad. Here's to hoping.
5 stars. That was great. I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapters. I hope your surgery went well but am a little worried that you haven't been back to the site since 2012. I hope everything's OK.
Keep the good work up,I would like to know what happens next.
Hi good story but you got a 1 one the last part because you never finished it hope you come back to it
Thank you ... look forward to the next part of your story
Sent the link to your story for other friends to enjoy ... must read in my opinion
Even as it is hard to believe that it will happen, I would be very happy to see this story continue!
Very nice ideas, details and writing!
The author mentioned a surgery he has to go through in his biography. Maybe he passed. Sad.
Unfortunately, I like many others wish this to continue but seeing as this chapter was posted in 2014, and it was the last post of this author I have my doubts
You do good work. Two things I would suggest to get a bit more exposure is to change your alias to something more memorable and to branch out more into the more popular genres rather than posting a majority of your work into mind control /hypnosis. Not to say you should change your work all that much (This series could easily be reclassified as sci fi/ fantasy for example). Also get an editor to help polish out the minor errors that you make with relative consistency (missing or unfinished words etc.)
Keep up the good work, looking forward to part 4.
Looking forward for the another chapter of this series please continue this series
Is there any chance that this is an active series? I am hooked on the story and would love to hear more. It is very well set up.
I just stumbled upon this story and found it very interesting. Please can I have some more ? ;-}
Such a good story. I do hope you will exert your considerable talents for the next episode!
Hello, great story well written can't wait for the next chapters please hurry I've been dying you for years
The story line is awesome and the sex is great. I hope the rest I coming soon!
This Story is realy realy good doc. The Sex Scenes aren't really even Important (although a highly appreciated addition) because the Story line is so good. I hope you are able to continue This Story soon and to it's conclusion.
This story definitely has the potential to be the next "Last Tritan" keep up the good work, I'll be making sure to keep checking in for the next chapter in the story 👍
Well so far the story has kept my attention riveted, I even find myself jumping ahead over the sex scenes to find out what happens next...
I just read all 3 chapters in about 1 hour, and would love to read more.
Thanks for the good read!!
I am truly impressed! Very few stories keep me absolutely engrossed. This was definitely one of the best.
Oh great one, I beseech thee as your humble servant. You have lead us to this point and we have traveled with you willingly. Are we to bivouac down to await further orders or are we to Charlie Mike without you? Pray tell, how will we fare while waiting for another installment of your lifeline? Please do not dawdle, but instead be quick footed and continue this tale as my mind is wandering about.
(irrev)
Definitely keeping my interest...waiting for more!!!
I found the whole story to be well written and quite enjoyable and for the most part every part is written to make it sound to be quite real in nature. Though it is not as sexually stimulating as some stories here it is quite interesting to me and my friends who have read the whole three chapters so far. We are hoping that you continue with the rest of the story soon, as it has captured our interest.
Brilliant stories, good plots even without the sex, have enjoyed reading all you have posted here and hope you one day get the time and inspiration to write again.
Until that day comes I will just have to wait In anticipation of your next burst of activity.
Thank you for the stories you have posted.
Good Story but you haven't added any for a long time I hope you don't just stop and leave us hanging!!!!!
I've been waiting for more but it never comes, WHY? Write more anything but I want more of this series. Thank you for this series but I want more of it!
This is really good stuff. I really enjoyed this and am looking forward to chapter 4. Please hurry. First story ever that also involves something else other than pure sex. Also love your style of writing.
Keep it up!!
According to the Story Index for this Author, Ch. 03 was posted 10/19/14 . But some of the comments to this chapter are dated as early as 12/25/09. How is that possible?
I also read the comment by the author relating health issues as a reason for the delay in the continuation.
"I've been in either a hospital or skilled nursing facility for a total of more than a year and a half. I've been unable to write due the medication I've been taking. "
I certainly hope the author's health is improving and Ch. 04 will be forthcoming. It is too intriguing a tale for it to not keep going.
I will always take care of you started 2009 seven chapters unfinished . the artefact started 2009 chapters 1 and two . Five year gap to chapter 3 2014 still unfinished.it's so frustrating when reading the stories waiting and waiting and waiting for the next chapter that near comes . My question to you doc87123 is , are you gonna finish these twoT brilliant stories before I die ??????? If you're not going to give these stories closure why in the hell do you write them in the first place .. Finish what you started. And I don't mean in 10 years time.
i do hate waiting for a next chapter...especially if the writing is so good as yours is.
Hopefully we don't have to wait too much longer for the next installment
Love your development of the story line and the characters. The sex is good and yes I would also enjoy additional details with the deepening plot. Oh you have to continue this story in Mind Control thru the joining of the Magic. Kudos.
"Many people requested that I submit this chapter as soon as possible, so I wrote it as quickly as I could, hoping to be able to submit it in time for it to be up in time to be my Christmas gift to you; Merry Christmas and happy New Year."
I agree with dliter. I remember reading this chapter on another site years ago. Why repost it here and pretend you have just written it?.
When will you write more? Please continue to write. Thank you.
Have read all 3 chapters yearly since original posting in '09 and was surprised to see this chapter with a new release date. I was hoping it was changed in some way to prepare for a new chapter, but I don't see any difference. Please continue this story as well as "I Will Take Care of You."
thanks
Pleased that your story actually has some substance to it. Not just all about sex. Please continue, and don't let this be just another good story that doesn't get completed.
I started reading this years ago and was upset when it just stopped . I am so glad you have come back to finish this story. The main reason I realy liked this was it just was't about sex , although that part is great, there is a plot areal story line. Please keep writting. I can't wait to read the next instalment. Great Job!
I was so glad when I saw this chapter released. This had been one of my favorite stories on the site, and I was ecstatic to see it continued. So many of the authors I love reading on here stopped writing, at least for a long time. It is a relief to see that some of them come back.
i am pleased to see an addition made recently there are many great writers on this site but too many of them leave really great stories unfinished. Please continue your amazing story and let all of us find out the ending to it.
I stumbled upon this series 5 hours ago and i can honestly say that i am thrilled with it. I've never experienced strong emotions whenever i read stories here, i just read for the sake of reading but this is something else! Especially when i read about sarahs story, I could feel the nervousness building inside of me! Ive never been a fan of humiliation play, i would never treat a woman like that not in a million years! I became so unconfortable when i read about her story and was actually quite angry about what her sister obviously forced on her, even if she didnt know she wanted it...no one should be allowed to humiliate another human being...hut i digress.
Your story is great and i love how you've built it up until now. 5* from me, even if i didnt like that part with the humiliation, the overall chapter was fantasticly written.
To be completely honest ive commented on two stories ever yours being the second one. You need to keep going this story is awesome. I want more so plz keep going n post more often
Enjoyed what you have written so far and looking forward to following along.
Iam sorry I only voted 4 stars on the first two parts it is a very good story line and I hope to see more of the story soon
So glad to see you continuing this story. I, like many others, have been anxiously waiting for a long time. I sincerely hope you continue this adventure soon.
I really hope you can keep posting new chapters on a regular basis now, I'd hate to have to wait another 5 years in between each future chapter
This is one of the best stories here, i sincerely hope you plan to keep it going for a long time,
Cheers from a pleased reader.
Really liked ur work but was disappointed with such a long break , but excited now to see u back here.
Grt imagination n u have a real talent for writing grossing story... Plz less delay between chapters....
Thanks for continuing the story and I hope there will not be this long a gap between the further chapters.. i am glad to be able to see this story back up and running... Five *****
Had read this a few years back and thought it was dead in the water. Wonderful to see the story continue, and it pick up as if it had not been dropped at all. Well done, an thanks for coming back to complete it.
Mal
This was well worth waiting for. Looking forward to reading the rest.
I just wanted to say I'm glad your health is improving for you. So glad to have you back and I hope that one day you'll be able to continue this and your other story I'll Always Take Care of You.
I too am still gaining my strength after major surgery, I failed to read post before I posted. I hope you'll be able to continue this great story soon. be well/ bill
I've read this chapter before, knew the every thing that he was going to go through and the job. hell I already had it scored with 5 stars. So, I'm not sure what gives but I'm still waiting to find out about the show and the battle.
My surgery several years ago had several complications. Since my last post, I've been in either a hospital or skilled nursing facility for a total of more than a year and a half. I've been unable to write due the medication I've been taking.
It's taken years to get to this point. When I checked literotica, someone had reported this chapter as being word for word identical to chapter 2. I just resubmitted without changes.
I hope to be able to write again within a couple of months.
I'm glad to see your writer's block is over :):)
You have created a wonderful series here. Every chapter is a cliffhanger.
And as always, the sex is great....sometimes cute...but great just the same.
Thanks once again for sharing
Bob.
Your story is very beautiful and well composed!
Please keep going!
Please don't keep us waiting for too long!
great to see another chapter, and hopefully more. It is good to have you back.
This story was first submitted in 12/25/09 . So where has doc been for almost 5 years ? Has someone hacked his account ? Who resubmitted this chapter ? Why ? Will we be seeing more ? Highly unlikely .
I agree with all that ZapBrannigan69 said. As such I enjoyed the combination of the Artifact story with the erotica, so please keep going.
The writing in some ways is not outstanding, however the story does suck you in as you can see from all the positive comments. This one felt a bit more rushed than the last two, the others had a bit more detail and depth to them.
All in all though a great read, well done, keep going!
Very nice job of plot with sex. I know it's been a while since you've worked on this, but I'd really like to read the end of the story if you have it in you.
I love how you have a great balance of explosive sex and plot. Keeps me anxious for more!
Wonderful story with just the perfect mix of good versus evil and sex. Please write more chapters.
I can't wait to read the next installment. Thank you for sharing your gift with us.
...there is more to come, thx for your xmas gift and l wish you have great holidays and an even better new year.
How come you did not finish the story? I am a new reader and I would like to know how you would finish this story.
Such a great story, the plot is just beginning to unfold, and the characters are well developed. I'm dying to see how it all gets concluded. Please finish this one.
I hope that sometime in the near future that you will write 3 to 4 more chapters. What I've read so far makes me want to have an 'Artifact', so I can influence you into finishing this story. It's 2013 now so a 4 year wait is more punishment than teasing. Please put me out of my misery!
Almost four years is a long wait for chapter 4! Am I correct in assuming that chapter 4 might never appear? You last logged in to your account in April 2010, and your last posting was March 2010 - not too promising for a chapter 4 to be posted. This is a true disappointment as The Artifact is an original and well written story with just the right amount of sex, coupled with a Great Plot and Character development!
i have enjoyed your story so far i truly look forward to the next addition to your series
This is an amazing story and I'm sure a lot of your readers are as dismayed as I am to think you may never finish it off :(