All Comments on 'The Auction'

I liked the story, the premise in the title is what drew me in to read it. It needs a bit of an edit to deal with some small grammatical/spelling errors, but at the end of the day, that's not too big-a-deal.

I feel like the story could really have been drawn out a lot more and elaborated on a few things. Like, who this person was, had they done things like this before? Who was this mysterious client willing to pay $7,000,000 to a simple security person?

You did a good job of describing the scenes, but at least to me, it read a little clunky, in that you dedicated a paragraph or two to describing someone or something. It's usually better if you try and make it flow properly, use actions of a character to help describe them (Ex. His lithe frame helped him sneak up behind her. Or. The blue light from her phone illuminated her striking brown eyes and unblemished tanned skin) things like that.

Keep writing and learning, it's great fun! :D

Hi AssualtMouse,

Many thanks for your comment. I appreciate what you said and will take it on board. Always open for constructive help. Feel free to DM me if there is anything else or want a story written for yourself 😀

Mrmark83