All Comments on 'The Barn Swallow Club Pt. 01'

funny

can you get my wife a job?

I was trying to addup some numbers involved you have two businesses now. Witch one will your sister run will see be hands on.

Good read so far!

Great start ... Has lots of potential ****

Very Fun Idea!

Really? This is your idea of erotic? Seek help you need writing stories about fucked up cunt whores is never erotic. Its just pathetic sick cuck bullshit.

So far good. I’m waiting to see what his sister Diane thinks of the Club. {A teaser of accidental incest). Does she participate?

Unsustainable in the real world. People talk. Someone would describe Liz to her husband Dominic and he wouldn't be happy. Even if Maria or even Candy were to service Dominic, some jerk wouldn't be able to keep his mouth shut about the blonde who can't keep her mouth shut. Dominic would figure it out and there would be an "accident" on the factory floor. Then there's the traitors. His company whore wife and his boss who hired her.

This has to be viewed, read, and regarded as pure satire. Hopefully Hofeeder intended it as such. And while I know that this is LW, I always hate to see a wife walk willingly into a situation to cheat on her husband. Especially when she compounds the weighty gravity of infidelity and adultery by taking a gig as company whore. Even though she gets paid for it.

As such, Liz's volunteered, offering herself for employment by bartering and auditioning. She didn't find the gig by sheer happenstance. Yes, she overheard Dominic talking about it. But she should have stayed far away from the deal. The nuances of the situation push me to dislike it. Liz becomes less. Diminishing in worth and character. Candy is more honest. Kind of funny but the clown is still crying. 2☆

Fantastic Story! Cant wait for part 2!

What a great story! I loved it.

I like cumswallowing stories but way too many cheating wives in this story for me, sorry.

Could not bet past the first few paragraphs. I was wondering how something that is suppose to be "renowned" could at the same time be secret. Like one of those touted "world famous" celebrities, that you never heard of. I suspect your writing talent is equally world famous. Sorry I am inadequate to appreciate it. Write on.

Ridiculously hilarious.

Please keep writing!.

I have some haters on this site. There are a few psychopaths out there who waste their precious time insulting me in the comments. What kind of socially retarded ass even bothers doing that? Not happy with my work? Don't read it. Give me one star and move on. Go write your own story. What will your feckless, useless, angry, stupid and laughable comments achieve? All I can imagine is that you are all of those things, feckless, useless, angry, stupid and laughable. Trolling the internet has become an outlet for all the damaged idiot losers who used to be our village idiots. lol

Not being a category Nazi, but would this be better suited in the Fetish category?

The concept was great, but I think you rushed it a little.

The escort was making $200 per BJ for 5 or 6 per day. If that went on for any length of time, she'd own the company. And there's no way the boss didn't know his secretary was listening in to everything said in his office.

So, good story, but too rushed. A slower build-up for more discretion would make it sound more realistic. Three women low-balling each other to give daily BJs sounds more like a comedy. But I'll give it a 4.

A really funny story, but in my opinion it belongs in fetish! 4*!

Fantasy is always a good thing. It made me laugh until I had to stop reading and have some water. Thank you.