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All Comments on 'The Beginning to a Great Afternoon'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Why the Tense Changes?

This story is excellent, just the right length to describe a quickie and very nice description. The changes in tense are a little confusing, though. If that one flaw were straightened out, this story would be almost perfect.

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