All Comments on 'The Big Favor Ch. 02'

I enjoyed both pieces and the male character's treatment of his partner. I found the sections of translation helpful in understanding what was being shared but as others have suggested they were a bit distracting. The writing style seems to match that of the main character and is easy, laid back, and easy going.

As to the your use of a spell checker in Microsoft Word, it only finds and helps you correct errors which are no real words within the dictionary that exists on your system. It will not help you at all where you use an incorrect word in a sentence which is the wrong word entirely such as you did in the very first sentence of this second chapter. There you state, "As Carmen claimed up into my jeep," when you really meant, "As Carmen climbed up into my jeep,". A spell checker will will not correct this type of error. It can only be found by an editor, other than yourself, who proofreads your piece and notes these and other errors that you may have made. Often times when an author tries to proofread his own work, he mentally knows what he wants to say and as he re-reads his work and he mentally transposes this type of error in his mind with the word he wants it to be and thus misses the mistake. It's a very common type of error for authors to make. Having your piece read by someone else helps eliminate that error because they read each word as written and spot the incorrectness more readily and thus make the correction. However, it is also true that the more skilled in English an editor is, the more improved the finished piece will be in being error free, improved flow of ideas, and much improved quality of writing that enhances the original author's piece overall.

Consider seeking out an editor to assist you with your writing and I believe you'll find that you too will find it enhances your own writing and improves tour overall enjoyment and quality of your work as well as the type of comments you get back from others.

Good Luck! And Take Care!

Sexy story thanks for sharing.

The only observation would be to lengthen the story while you include conversations and thoughts between Carmen and her husband before and after her erotic encounter. Otherwise, an extremely well written erotic story with little emotion but great potential to expand.

You certainly ain't describing your brain. Based on this story of course.

Couldn't think about her WARN hand because I was STARRING at the first mistake!