All Comments on 'The Blizzard Ch. 02'

Great storyline, keep it going. Maybe try a different forced fantasy for Liz where Autumn goes back to Liz's house and accuses her of trying to bed her husband and then ties her up before using dildos etc on her

You might go back through the stories. You have Liz and Autumn switched a few times. Otherwise I think they're great, a little short on the foreplay in the first one, but great.

Outstanding story. Keep em coming! And reach out if you want a proofreader. I'd be happy to read the next chapter a few days early.

Well-done!!! Powerfully crafted setting, nice set-ups for credibility, and a nicely narrated tempo. Looking forward to how this might progress...keep writing!!

I agree with the other comments. Lovely story line well written. The only difference for me is that it is more than long enough for me. I was advised to keep the conversations during sex in my stories more punchy and agreed with that suggestion. I suggest it might be the same for you.

I would love to read more of your writing particularly a completely different story line rather than trying to progress this one too far. Keep them coming

I don't know what happened in the last comment. Some of it is mine but much of it is not. I would not write "lovely story line well written" about my own story or ask for them to keep coming.

It is a mystery.

Three names. And you couldn't keep two of them straight?

liked it very much,,erotic and romantic,, even loving,,,well done,,open ended for the reader to imagine their own finality,,

Great work. So much further for this to go - very sexy but you managed a strong backstory without taking pages of preamble, really generated character definition so easily. Lots of fun, hope you keep writing