All Comments on 'The Boss'

Good premise.

Bt the sex went much too quickly.

Not nearly enough steps and details.

Not nearly enough dialog about what she wanted him to do to/with her body. Better if she'd been more demanding and specific.

Zoomed too instantly from bared breasts to his tongue in her pussy.

Needed some of her playing with his cock and balls, getting him close to cumming, but not permitting it until he made her cum fitst.

Three stars.

well written needs more

Sorry to be a killjoy, but I honestly can't tell if the plot and/or sex is good or not because the story is literally unreadable due to woefully awful grammar and syntax. The first paragraph alone consists of a single run-on sentence of well over 100 words. Basic punctuation like periods and question marks, are either non-existent or incorrectly used throughout the story. I just couldn't follow along and quickly lost interest in trying to read it.

very well written story, I like it